16 March 2008

Lesser than Macbeth ...less words anyway - the edits

To get the show to 90 minutes some savage cuts are required.
The following scenes are the ones I've targeted in my script editing... although lines go in other scenes. The Macbeths' lines are mostly in tact.

Act 1 scene 2- the Bloody Sergeant scene - a long scene where Macbeth's valour and military achievement is praised. Down to one speech and a battle.
Act 1 sc 3 - the first part of the witches scene where they go on about the Sailor going to Aleppo has been cut. Angus has been written out in the second part of the scene and the dialogue there cut.
Act 1 Sc 4 - a third removed. The important thing here is Duncan announces his son will be Prince of Cumberland.
Act 2 Sc 3 - half of the porter's scene.
Act2 Sc 4 - the old man has been written out and this becomes a discussion between Macduff and Ross.
Act 3 sc 1 - much of the lengthy discussion with the murderer has been removed.
Act 3 sc 3 - this is where Banquo is murdered and Fleance escapes, I'm opting to show this rather than talk it. This is down to 4 lines and a brutal murder.
Act 3 Sc 5 - jury is out on how much here is cut but Hecate's long intro is excessive. IF Hecate stays in this will be a lot shorter.
Act 3 Sc 6 - Cut. The one line of value is written into Act 3 Sc 4.
Act 4 Sc 2 - This is long for what it is. Again show not tell, a few lines to set the scene, Lady Macduff's despair and then the murderers turn up and kill them.
Act 4 Sc 3 - cut from 7 pages to 2. While I understand the testing of Macduff in the atmosphere of people not trusting each other it reads like Morecombe and Wise. I've written the doctor out, and allowed for some build up of tension with Ross hovering all the while so the audience know what he has come to say.
Act 5 Sc 2 - down to a few lines
Act 5 Sc 7 - Lines removed here. Fighting and Macbeth talks to himself.
Act 5 Sc 9 - Young Siward (killed in sc 7) and old Siward dialogue removed. Comrades all embrace each other, mourn the dead and then Macduff brings in Macbeth's head. Malcolm ends the play.

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